Your advice please.

[Andrew Robinson]

Usual imho disclaimers apply...

There are some great sounds and catchy hooks in there, but for me it's not
all fitting together quite right yet. I think there are too many stylistic
changes, the section up to 1:40 doesn't have a lot in common with the
section from 4:30 for example. I'd be inclined to split what you've done
into two tracks (or if you prefer, two mixes of the same track). My
approach would be to start off by editing what you have down to make a
fairly euphoric 'radio edit', then make a dark version of the track from
the bits that didn't go into the radio edit, then extend the edit back out
to club length without using the dark bits.

I also agree with Andrew T that there's something that happens every 4th
bar when it gets going that doesn't change in the satisfying way I'm
expecting it to, although I can't quite pinpoint what it is.

Hope this helps!

- Andy_R



On 28 May 2015 at 22:35, Andrew Tarpinian <andrewtarpinian at gmail.com> wrote:

> Imo of course,
>
> I think it's a bit too drawn out, I would take what you have here and
> condense it to become the first half of the song, then do a variation on
> the bass/Mel for the second part.
>
> The bass Mel notes in the 4th bar of the main loop bug bug me a bit, I
> think it could be a touch more interesting before going back around.
>
> This may be more opinion than you were asking for...
>
> Sent from my iPhone
>
> On May 28, 2015, at 12:38 AM, Marc Sims <avarlinqui at hotmail.com> wrote:
>
>  I've got this tune that, I think is pretty much there, but I've got a
> feeling its missing something just cant think of it, its not been automated
> or fully mastered yet.  Any suggestions?
>
> https://soundcloud.com/bollocks-to-this/126-the-3rd
>
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