track... unfinished or...

[Gert van Santen]

Joost Schuttelaar schreef:
> So I started this song a few weeks ago... but I didn't really finish it:
> 
> http://www.joostschuttelaar.nl/zut/emcgab2.mp3
> 
> It's kinda rough. The thing it would need is to just round it up  
> nicely and so some proper mixing.
> 
> Finish it? Or see it as finished and 'improve between songs, not  
> within'?
> 

I like it a lot.

There's definitely room for some 
improvement, though.
You might consider making the slow intro 
a lot shorter or delete it altogether, 
which would make the whole thing sort of 
a "single" track.
There are some things, chord/melody 
wise, where you might want to change 
just one note to make it even more 
melancholic.
Perhaps just a little more movement in 
the drums.
You might want to add some sort of a 
breakdown or bridge with another 
chord/changed chords.
This is another song that seems to be 
crying for a vocal.

I'd love to see this one finished.

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