Fractales12 New song : " For a change "

[Gorman, Declan]

Great feedback Tony.

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From: music-bar-bounces at lists.music-bar.org [mailto:music-bar-bounces at lists.music-bar.org] On Behalf Of Tony Hardie-Bick
Sent: 17 March 2012 14:16
To: Music-bar
Subject: Re: Fractales12 New song : " For a change "

On 15/03/12 10:40, Romain / rXg wrote:
> Thank you tony,
> just let me know  for  the music ... (It s not zappa style  i must admit)

Well I have no preference for style, only good music :)

Strange to say... the lyrics in this track are so good - intense, and beginning 
to develop a unique voice (in the sense of language) - but you can hardly hear 
them in the mix. So much work, and most who hear this track will not have any 
idea what is going on underneath.

If you're serious about writing lyrics, then the music is either equal or less 
important. Given the quality of your lyrics, I think you need to see music as a 
way of putting your words across, rather than a way of creating a vibe that 
hopefully some people will recognise and then start listening (the very opposite 
of the entertainment industry idea... "by the way, which one is Pink?"). This 
will make your work more original and subversive, and less like the bands your 
friends wish you were in ;) They will like your music less if you step outside 
the social identity they (and you) have created for it.

The music itself - brilliantly put together, although... chorus on guitar? I 
know there are loads of bands that do this, but, just my opinion, it really is a 
sound that got used up very quickly a long time ago. Also, bass drum in the 
opening minute or two - it's a heartbeat, so, understand what metaphor you're 
using, and mix it as such - ie, more bassy, more reverb, less like a cardboard box.

The dynamics of the piece are strangely flat in the loud section, and although 
you could see this as a technical issue (compression ratio), I'd say forget 
technology, and ask yourself about the narrative structure of the art, rather 
than the sonic structure of the music. Always see the big picture ;)

But... brilliant. You're in good company in recording inspired lyrics that 
nobody ever gets to hear because the music's getting in the way :)

Tony (HB)



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