Dein Daybreak -- new track

[M-.-n]

Hey Kai,

I actually like it quite a bit. It's straightforward but efficient, no 
problem to have it stick in you mind. Nice bit of pop !

My little comments:

1- The snare is wierd. it seems like it's been heavily destroyed by a 
bit reducer and I don't think it works. It's also eq.'ed a little hi for 
my taste.

2- I would add a couple of variation is the synth bass line, just 
because it's VERY present and it becomes too much of a repetitive 
gimmick by the end. The sound is very nice tho.

3. I'm not sure you really got deep bass in the track (?). I was 
wondering if removing a bit of bass in the synth of (2) and adding a 
clean low bass doing an alternate (or double) lick wouldn't be 
interesting. For this one & the previous one, I'd check strict machine 
from goldfrapp:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P2VktozqkSc

4. I would use pads like you do the intro somewhere else. Generally the 
track is quite empty and pad-style would definitly lift it. Could be 
nice in the chorus or second verse ? Somehow it needs just to be a bit 
more dreamy/druggy. I don't know really how to explain this properly. 
Although it's not in same style, I'm thinking of the dreaminess of 
olive's "you're not alone", the contrast behind the chorus & verse. 
Notice also the second verse has a tiny pad that makes it different from 
the first one.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SQWmG44MLho

5. The kick is a little muddy.

6. Not sure at all of the outro. It's too wierd for a track that is 
cruising pop that way.

In my opinion you got a very serious hit contender. Work it, you're 
close to something big !!!

Hope this can be of any help.
M.

K9 Kai Niggemann a écrit :
> Hi bar,
>
> once more I'd like to offer you a fresh new track for listening and  
> would love to hear your thoughts.
>
> I was totally overwhelmed by the great response I got last time (and  
> never got back to Peter and Michael in the end, who gave some  
> incrdibly detailed feedback!)
>
> so if you have a moment and would like to help us with your fresh (and  
> hopefully clean) ears, here is "Floating":
>
> http://deindaybreak.com
>
> or:
>
> http://myspace.com/deindaybreak
>
> (it's the same source file, but will probably sound better on our  
> site, cause it's a 192K MP3 there)
>
> again thank you!
>
> Kai
>
>
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